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Hey Chelsey!
ReplyDeleteYour introduction on Fairytale Case Files was so awesome! I think it would be really cool if you actually made up a “Missing Persons” poster! The ‘Breadcrumbs Case’ link goes to another Storybook website, is this one from last semester? Hunter has a really likable personality – he seems so kind, yet firm – exactly what you would want in a police officer! As far a form goes, I think if you re-arranged the elephant picture a bit, it could act as a nice separation between the first part (with Hunter’s memories of Wolfgang) and the next (with Wolfgang flying in on Airavat). You describe the scene so well - I can easily picture Wolfgang in his beautiful robes! Wolfgang seems so excited to tell his story to Hunter – and I am eager to hear it! Another comment on form; I think having a slight separation from the story and the “extra” info could be helpful (like a line break just before the Image Information piece). This was a great introduction to your storybook, and I look forward to reading the rest of it!
Hey Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteThe “wow” moment for me was when you described the flying three headed elephant. You had a great use of all caps that emphasized the shock that probably accompanied the sight of seeing Airavat in the air. I also, like the format of your web page. The dark background goes perfectly with the mystery theme that you have chosen to employ. I thought you did a great job in setting the stage for what will most likely be some very interesting stories about Wolfgang’s cases. Wolfgang sort of reminds me of Sherlock Holmes, in that he is a little bit arrogant, but still well liked. I don't know if this is what you were trying to convey in Wolfgang. The picture of Airavat, who may also make an appearance in my storybook, is a great addition and it gives the reader a clear picture of what the three headed elephant looks like. I think there could be a better place for the picture though. Great job on this introduction and I am sure you will have some great stories to go along with it.
Chelsey, I love that you are continuing your project from the Myth & Folklore class. I'm a big fan of detective stories, so I was immediately hooked on the idea of your project. My first impressions of the introduction was that you are really creative with your character choice. I really liked how you made Hunter a unique half-man, half-deer cop (Hunter is ironic name for a half deer!). Also, my favorite part was when you had Wolfgang fly in on a three-headed elephant. That is a cool, creative way to bring a touch of Indian culture to the project.
ReplyDeleteIn regards to formatting, the way you have your site set up is easy to follow. The dark background sets the tone of the storybook, and the light font color on the dark background was easy to read. I would suggest making the image one size bigger just so readers are able to see the detail in the picture.
Hope this was helpful!
Hey Chelsey, I just wanted to stop by and tell you that I really like the color combination you have chosen for your blog. It's light and fun. The soft colors allow for the focus to go straight to your blog posts.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I love the baby meme you used on the Comment Wall, it totally made me LOL.
ReplyDeleteI'm from the Myth and Folklore class, but I chose to read your storybook as one of my extra credit ones. I thought the look of your storybook site fit perfectly with the scary mysterious theme as a whole. Also the cover page image was great at setting the scene. Your introduction was extremely well written and you did a good job of intertwining all the parts to make it flow smoothly. I couldn't predict any part of the intro and when it got to the end I was excited to read the first story.
Your first story was so well written, all of the changes you made seemed to still perfectly fit within the plot. I like that he was able to answer the riddles so easily and that he didn't use his wish on himself, but on others. I'm excited to see how those men are now his guides throughout your other stories.
Hi Chelsey! I just dropped by to say I love your blog, the color is what initially drew me in and I was done. This colors is so pretty, I also like how your photos have this very neatly done photograph to them. Great job on choosing such a pretty layout :)
ReplyDeleteHey Chelsey! I loved how you had so many videos to listen to – I chose the “Bombs Away”, because I had never heard of it before. I really enjoyed it, excellent music! The video part was creppy (in a good way), and very moving. I think it was a great choice for your comment wall! I hope you have a wonderful spring break!
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ReplyDeleteAiravat, the flying elephant sounds cool! I wish I was flying with Airavat, and wish if it was possible in today’s world. I really liked your story and introduction. Good job! With the introduction. It really provides the background about the story and why the investigation needs to be done. I do wonder about the mysterious land that Airavat flew to? I am also wondering if Airavat is one of the kind. Are there more of the Airavat’s kind? It would be so cool to have more than one of these flying elephants. I think the title for the story could be a little better, the story is related to Pandava brothers and bringing them back to life. In my view you would have a strong title if you could relate it with Pandava brother instead of what you have right now. The story is really interesting to read! I enjoyed it all the way while I was reading it. Good job on the presentation of the story and the whole story.
Hey Chelsey!
ReplyDeleteYour comment wall has a great set up. It is very inviting and entertaining. I love the picture you put here. It is really funny. I also think it is very impressive to put a whole playlist of songs on your comment wall. I like the songs you have chosen to add as well. Some of them I have heard before but some are new.
Thanks for posting
-Sara
Hi Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteYou have really good pieces of music posted up. I'm not sure what I like more, classical instruments or a capella. I will say thought that the 99 second Harry Potter is threatening to drag me into the the weird side of youtube again, and I'm not sure if I want to go back there... (haha)
Anyways, you had some really good music picks. Thanks for sharing them.
Hey Chelsey, I wanted to share some comments on your story "To drink or not to drink?" I was drawn to your story just from the title. It is a really good hook mechanism and caught my interest. The next thing that caught my eye was your great design and background of your storybook. It seems to give off a mystery type feeling from the start. I myself did not do a storybook, but as I see more and more of them I like the idea more than the portfolio. In addition, I was impressed with the amount of dialogue you used throughout your story between Hunter and Wolfgang. I always find it hard to included dialogue in my stories, so I usually write them in third person. However, when you use dialogue I feel like it helps give a lot more personality to the characters. All in all, your story was a very interesting read and I look forwards to more of your postings. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteHey Chelsey! I really enjoyed your story based off of Riddles at the Lake. I love stories that include a challenge for the main character to solve so this one really caught my attention! The changes you made to the story really seemed to help it fit with your detective storybook theme. I like that you chose to make the riddles easier to solve because I really struggle when it comes to riddles in the first place, so if you would have kept the original ones it probably would have been completely over my head! It was clever that Wolfgang decided to use his wish to bring the men back to life so they could guide him through the land. I wonder what he would ask for if he was granted a second wish! I like that you chose to break the story up so much between the characters conversations… it made it easy to read and kept my attention. I am curious to hear what happens in Wolfgang’s next case!
ReplyDeleteHi Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteI wish I would have looked at your storybook sooner! It hopped up to one of my top storybooks almost instantly. I love the feel of the website. It's pretty awesome how you have it feel so gloomy. It makes me feel like I am about to read about some really intense mysteries. After reading the introductions, I went back to your storybook from last semester. It is based a bit off of Once Upon a Time right? Or was that someone else? I am really getting that vibe and it's making me happier that I found your stories! The two stories you've posted have been wonderful and I didn't see any major problems with them. I will check back for sure! I cannot see where you go with this storybook because your last one was awesome!
I forgot to mention that it was brilliant how you continued with the main character, Wolfgang, in both storybooks. Kudos on your continuity!
DeleteI think making your storybook centered around case files is such a great idea! I love all things crime/forensics when I watch tv, so it makes sense to read a storybook that is similar! I really liked the Who's Guilty? story. It make me feel like I was a part of the action. And who doesn't love dogs? I think you did a really great job with all of the dialogue and description in this story. It can be hard to make conversations sound natural and to also give enough details to a story that the reader can really imagine it. You really painted a picture with words and made the characters just realistic enough for me to be interested while still different and interesting enough for the story to feel extremely unique. I also really like the layout of your entire storybook. It really seems to fit the style of your stories and introduction, and I can't think of anything that could improve the design!
ReplyDeleteHello Chelsey. I usually enjoy reading stories where the characters are depicted as animals. This storybook entry was no exception. I think that you created a great way to connect the characters from the Mahabharata with the characters that you have created for this narrative. Reading the introduction I could tell that you put a lot of thought into the development of your characters.
ReplyDeleteAs I was reading the first story I felt as though your description of the detective’s encounter evoked a vivid picture in my mind as to the setting of your story. I think that this is always a good sign for a writer so good job! I wonder what plot devices you will use in order to connect the detective with even more of the characters from the Mahabharata. I look forward to reading more of the entries in your storybook project. Good luck with your other stories.
Hi Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story. I read the introduction first, and from there you had my undivided attention. The details that you used were great, and I loved how your story flowed. There were not any abrupt stops while I was reading, and no grammatical errors from what I could see. Excellent job! The picture that you chose on your site page had a Sherlock Holmes meets Wilkie Collins feel.
When reading you story “to drink or not to drink”, I imagined Wolfgang as this flamboyant character who can be over the top at times. I like the personal traits that you gave Wolfgang and Hunter. It made them more relatable. In addition, I like that you mentioned the names of other fairytales and fables and you tied “The Ramayana into this story.
Your creativity shows and once again you did an excellent job! I cannot wait until you finish your storybook.
My first thought was, what a creative idea. I was in love with the fact that you really dove deep into the world of fairytales and it reminded me a lot of Once Upon a Time. Which is one of my favorite shows, so I loved it. It was nice to read the Mahabharata influenced the first story and it was equally nice to read a modernization of the characters, setting. It makes it more reader friendly when your able to turn a classic into something we can visualize. At time it can be hard to envision characters back in that time period especially if your unfamiliar with it. You really set up the story and the setting so well, that I was able to distinguish between the characters talking in the office to characters talking within the story being told. That takes talent and practice. I really enjoyed reading your portfolio, it was a fast read and really entertaining.
ReplyDeleteHi Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteThis week your storybook really got my attention. I am so glad that I got a chance to read the introduction and the story of To drink or not to drink. That was so fun! I like the detective, dig down to the bottom of the case feeling! The eccentric characters and flair for the impossible make for such grand adventure! I felt as if I was watching the story play out like a television show rather than reading it. Well played humor! I thought I recognized the lake from somewhere like a Once Upon A Time episode. I love that show! I felt the mixture of so much legend and lore that it was like being a kid in a candy shop! The riddles reminded me of the Billy Goats Gruff I think. The Mahabharata mixed in there too! A virtual cornucopia of myth and fairytale fun!
Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteGreat beginning to your introduction! It is really captivating for the reader. Wow, a flying three-headed elephant would be terrifying. I’m glad nothing of the sort actually exists haha. I wonder if Wolfgang was secretly scared or nervous to go to the police station. Is it illegal to abandon the force for so long without notice? I chose the “To drink or not to drink?” story to read. I think that this story is a great excerpt to take from the Mahabharata. I think it is funny how confident Wolfgang appears when he goes to answer the riddle, knowing he will die if he answers wrong. The dialogue you used for the interview is well worded and gives great detail to what I imagine how an interview would sound. You used a great lead into your next story by stating that the Pandavas lead him to his next case. This story was very fun to read. Very creative and well written. Good work!
Hi, Chelsey!
ReplyDeleteI think it is so cool that your project is a continuation of a case-file project from Myth-Folklore. That is such a creative idea, and it seems to have worked really well, as you already have a wonderfully established backstory. I couldn’t wait to hear what Wolfgang had been up to, especially after that extremely ostentatious entrance—flying elephant definitely beats flying carpet.
Your first story was also great. I loved the line “Wolfgang was the picture of comfort”—what a fantastic way to describe how at ease he was without a lengthy description. While I would have perhaps liked to see a touch more description within the dialogue, I think you probably took the best approach considering you have a narration within a narration. I loved that you chose the Riddles at the Lake for his first case. I couldn’t agree more about it being an excellent riddle to for your protagonist to solve, and it set up an adventure with the Pandava’s very nicely! All in all, I love you storybook! I will definitely be back to read more!
Hi Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteThis week for free choice, I decided to revisit your work. You have had very creative ideas from the beginning of the semester. I like the adventure/mystery idea you wrote about. The introduction was very informative. I felt like I was reading a novel. Your portrayal of Wolfgang’s character, smart yet corky was great. I did read the Riddles at the lake and you did a good job encompassing the original brothers of Yudhishthira and substituting the Pandava brothers. Wolfgang’s mode of transportation was impressive. Using the flying elephant was funny. The title was a great play on words. It definitely matched the intent of the reading. The length was appropriate and got right to the point. This story reminds me a little of Sherlock Holmes. I will read Who’s guilty, as a free choice next week so I can catch up on Wolfgang’s adventures with the Pandava brothers. Have a great week!
Chelsey, Your titles “To Drink or Not to Drink” and “Who’s Guilty?” are what caught my attention! They do not seem at first glance to go with the title of your storybook, “Fairy Tale Case Files” so I wanted to read further because I was curious. I loved how you started out your storybook with “MISSING: Detective Wolfgang Forrester” – what a great hook! I liked how you claimed that the irony of it all was that the only person who had any chance of finding Wolfgang was Wolfgang himself. Next, you did not give away too much but instead subtly hinted at Hunter’s character by saying, “Scratching behind his antlers with his hooves…” This is a good tactic to make things interesting and one that I might try to implement in my own storybook. Wolfgang’s character is very humorous. You can really see his character when he asks where is the fun in getting straight to the point.
ReplyDeletep.s. that meme is precious!!
Hey Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteI really liked reading your storybook! The introduction was full of mystery and questions. I especially like the second story about which dogs in the kingdom chewed up the leather straps on the King's carriage. It all seemed very Sherlock Holmes to me; which just so happens to be one of my favorite movies. I am taking Myth and Folklore in the fall and I may look into using your story telling technique of making things a big mystery. It was an engaging story and honestly I am looking forward to read more of the adventure that Detective Wolfgang gets into. The mythical style of the original setting in the Enchanted Forest is a good a good comparison to parallel the mythical things that are going on in India as depicted in your story. It was a funny juxtaposition that Hunter was confused at the idea of talking dogs in India when the enchanted forest has so many magical creatures. I guess different mythical settings have different mythical creatures. Overall well done story and I look forward to the progressing adventures of Detective Wolfgang.
I also really liked the story of the lake in the original text. I thought the interjection of your detective was very clever. It felt almost noirish but did not have the femme fatale or the concept of nihilism or fatalism that would have clinched it.
ReplyDeleteThe format of your storybook is really fantastic. It feels moody and dark from using the black background with the grey text. I do wish the text was a bit larger of a font though. I’m a little older so it is harder for me to read these small fonts.
I do love the addition of the flying elephant. I thought the introduction to the storybook was very creative, using Hunter as a mythical creature PD officer looking for Wolfgang. All in all I feel like this storybook has a lot of potential.
The one thing I did wish about this story is that it had some more separate elements from the original story. Most of the story Wolfgang comes across as just a substitution for Yudhishthira . I think in that aspect it loses some of it’s originality.
Wow, your introduction is captivating! You did a really good job setting up the mysterious whereabouts of this great detective Wolfgang. The background information was perfect for showing the relationship between the two officers and how important it was for Hunter to find Wolfgang. What really put this introduction over the edge though was the entrance by Wolfgang and his brief description of where he had been and what he had been doing.
ReplyDeleteThis was a great way to tie the Mahabharata into your storybook story. I love the one you used about the Pandavas brothers drinking from the lake and dying. The story reminds me of the movie Monty Python and the Holy Grail where people have to answer three questions asked by a troll correctly to cross a bridge. You left the end open, which leaves room to expand the story in the upcoming weeks, but the last thing Wolfgang says leaves us wondering what his next adventures hold. Again, great job with this story!
Hey Chelsey!
ReplyDeleteI haven't read your blog yet which is so surprising since we are nearing the end of the semester! I have to say that when I first clicked on your storybook page it had a definite “wow” factor. The dark colors really create a mysterious vibe that draws you in and then the story collection is equally “Wowing”. Then, when I clicked on your comment page it was so cute and colorful and was so aesthetically pleasing to the audience - a definite contrast to the storybook page but I really think it works well.
I read your story “To drink or not to drink” and I thought it was written very well. I thought that the way in which you wrote the story with the dialogue made the characters seem very personable and also made the story have a more modern feel to it. This was a great story and I enjoyed reading it!
Chelsey,
ReplyDeleteAs with your other stories, I really enjoyed the way you have your storytelling set up to be a mystery, crime solving theme. I love shows like CSI, Law and Order and Criminal Minds so your style of storytelling is right up my alley. This story was very creative and I love the witty banter that is exchanged between Hunter and Wolfgang. You can tell as the story book progresses that they are comfortable with each other and that makes things interesting to read as the event unfold. It was interesting that Wolfgang struck up a deal with the goblin when bargaining for his body. It put more pressure on him to not mess up (even though I had a strong hunch he would be able to answer the riddle). It was fun playing along trying to answer the riddle myself as I read. The thing I like most about this story telling styles is it keeps the reader active by making them think ahead. Great job!
Your introduction really reeled me in! I love the main character and his sassy attitude! Also, the names of the characters are perfectly picked – I love the name Detective Wolfgang Forrester. And I really appreciated all of the small quirky details you incorporated into the tale, like “scratching with his hooves.” Little details like this really brought me into the fantasy world you created. My favorite little detail was the mention of the stranger in the home of the three bears! The character you created for wolfgang was very dynamic and fun!
ReplyDeleteI immediately recognized the ties between the details in the Mahabharata and your story. You did a really good job of tying in the original tales into your own. I have to admit, your stories were a bit more fun to read that the Indian Epics we were assigned. I think you really have a knack for writing.
Hi Chelsey! I really enjoyed reading through your storybook. I think your theme connecting each story was really strong, and I loved having the outsider character of Detective Wolfgang, through which we could view the stories through new eyes.
ReplyDeleteThe introduction did a great job of exposing the two main characters connecting each story and giving each distinctive personalities. It's so cool that this is a continuation of a previous storybook!
The dialogue between these two characters throughout the stories stood out to me as being exceptionally fun; you did a great job of making it feel like old friends talking.
I also really like that you went with a clean, simplistic design for your storybook. It still fits the theme and helps to portray that mysterious air of a detective story, but is super easy to read and navigate.
Great job!